Chapter+16

Sam, Lizzie and Bella all started screaming, Bella said quietly "Quick over to that fire exit", so they all ran to the fire exit and Lizzie tryed to open the door but it was jammed shut, they were all pushing and pushing at the door when Sam said "You idiots the door is locked" so he unlocked it but still no difference. They counted to three and all ran into the door and it opened with a very high pitch sqeaking noise. Wind and rain were blowing in through the door, Sams glasses blew off his face so he looked for them on the floor. When he found them he looked down in front of him and screamed. Lizzie and Bella rushed over and said "What happened are you ok." Sam said "yeah but don't look down", but they looked down anyway and saw Justins body lying right there on the ground, but not his head.

star- you discribed the seen very well star- you left on a cliff hanger wish- more flow, your first sentance was nealy two lines long. Also wasn't this chapter was ment to be edited so that they found the axe?