It was 3 o'clock in the morning and Bella and Lizzy were screaming like crazy chimps. The shining red axe from the murderer was lying blood stained on the ground. There was a blood trail leading to a river through some trees. Bella, Lizzy and Sam stood completely still, staring at the blood trail. " We have to follow that trail " mumbled Sam quietly. Bella and Lizzy looked at him cowardly. They were all covered head to toe in blood. It was starting to turn brown and smell really bad. But they were to shocked to care, they just kept on walking slowly. They then soon reached the trees. " I don't want to go any further " said Lizzy trembling.
" I know, but we have to " said Sam, standing still like a statue staring through the creaking trees.
After following the blood trail they soon came to a river. Sam breathed a sigh of relief. There was nothing there. "why don't we take a break and wash our faces and hands in the river" said Sam relieved. He knelt down above the river, cupped his hands and firmly splashed the liquid onto his face. He looked down at his dripping hands and saw that there was blood all over his hands. He jumped back and saw that a body was pinned to the sand by rusty nails. There was a massive gaping slice deeply cut into its forehead. Sam gagged and closed his eyes. He hoped that it was only a bad dream but it wasn't. It was real. He felt a rush of blood pumping through his body to his head. It was the most horrifying thing he had ever seen. Just a few feet behind him were Bella and Lizzy screaming loud enough to pierce holes through your ears. They had never seen anything as horrible ever before. The body lying there on the sand was Justin.
star- very good tenion, good imagary
star- an atmospher was created
wish- blood turns yelow-brown when it drys but blake makes it soynd scaryer anyway so keep it
if you want
Chapter 17
It was 3 o'clock in the morning and Bella and Lizzy were screaming like crazy chimps. The shining red axe from the murderer was lying blood stained on the ground. There was a blood trail leading to a river through some trees. Bella, Lizzy and Sam stood completely still, staring at the blood trail. " We have to follow that trail " mumbled Sam quietly. Bella and Lizzy looked at him cowardly. They were all covered head to toe in blood. It was starting to turn brown and smell really bad. But they were to shocked to care, they just kept on walking slowly. They then soon reached the trees. " I don't want to go any further " said Lizzy trembling.
" I know, but we have to " said Sam, standing still like a statue staring through the creaking trees.
After following the blood trail they soon came to a river. Sam breathed a sigh of relief. There was nothing there. "why don't we take a break and wash our faces and hands in the river" said Sam relieved. He knelt down above the river, cupped his hands and firmly splashed the liquid onto his face. He looked down at his dripping hands and saw that there was blood all over his hands. He jumped back and saw that a body was pinned to the sand by rusty nails. There was a massive gaping slice deeply cut into its forehead. Sam gagged and closed his eyes. He hoped that it was only a bad dream but it wasn't. It was real. He felt a rush of blood pumping through his body to his head. It was the most horrifying thing he had ever seen. Just a few feet behind him were Bella and Lizzy screaming loud enough to pierce holes through your ears. They had never seen anything as horrible ever before. The body lying there on the sand was Justin.
star- very good tenion, good imagary
star- an atmospher was created
wish- blood turns yelow-brown when it drys but blake makes it soynd scaryer anyway so keep it
if you want