Justin, Bella, Sam and Lizzie began to watch the film called 'Axe.' As the film begins Sam says apologetically,
"Excuse me for a second,I need to go to the bathroom."
"Oh! We have just pressed the play button and here you are going off to the loo!" exclaimed Justin.
Sam got up and crept behind the sofa. He crouched down low and made the sound of a ghost wailing. Bella and Lizzie scream and Justin shouts "Get out of the bathroom now." Just then Sam smirks from behind the sofa and Justin exlaims "So you have been hiding from the sofa all along". "Well I would not of expected that of you Sam. I thought you had gone to the toilet." "Bah you knew all along that I did it for a joke" said Sam. "I did not" said Justin the argument went on but it was avery bitter argument and would of been to boring tob write it down so I will skip the arguments when Bella says "Why can't we just watch the movie". "Oh you missed the excited bit in the film." said Lizzie. Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding. Ten 'o' clock struck Justin's Mum came in to say "children I am going to bed now" Justin said "okay I will see you in the morning" Justin's Mum went upstairs, all was silent aport from the creaking of the floorboards. Then Bella whispered "I vote we should ha-" Bella had a good reason to stop in her conversation because there was a knock on the door.
*Good use of speech
*Good atmosphere
A bit more discription
Justin, Bella, Sam and Lizzie began to watch the film called 'Axe.' As the film begins Sam says apologetically,
"Excuse me for a second,I need to go to the bathroom."
"Oh! We have just pressed the play button and here you are going off to the loo!" exclaimed Justin.
Sam got up and crept behind the sofa. He crouched down low and made the sound of a ghost wailing. Bella and Lizzie scream and Justin shouts "Get out of the bathroom now." Just then Sam smirks from behind the sofa and Justin exlaims "So you have been hiding from the sofa all along". "Well I would not of expected that of you Sam. I thought you had gone to the toilet." "Bah you knew all along that I did it for a joke" said Sam. "I did not" said Justin the argument went on but it was avery bitter argument and would of been to boring tob write it down so I will skip the arguments when Bella says "Why can't we just watch the movie". "Oh you missed the excited bit in the film." said Lizzie. Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding-Ding. Ten 'o' clock struck Justin's Mum came in to say "children I am going to bed now" Justin said "okay I will see you in the morning" Justin's Mum went upstairs, all was silent aport from the creaking of the floorboards. Then Bella whispered "I vote we should ha-" Bella had a good reason to stop in her conversation because there was a knock on the door.
*Good use of speech
*Good atmosphere
A bit more discription