After about half an hour of just sitting quietly in the police station, the three friends finally managed to get across to the policeman where they lived. Almost as soon as they had told him he was out of the room like a tornado, they heard voices from the other room and a few miniutes later there parents rushed into the room dabbing there eyes with there hankerchiefs. Finally the three friends felt safe, they couldn't have been more wrong.

Finally Lizzie was home after what had felt like an age she sat down on the sofa and immediately fell into a deep sleep. But what she did not know was that this sleep may be her last.

Sam woke up to his mum sitting beside him on his bed, "Sam I've got somthing to show you and I think that it will make you feel a lot better." As she was leading him down the stairs Sam wondered what she was going to show him. Right at the moment he thought that nothing would ever make him feel better after seeing his own friend being sliced through the head with an axe. When they were downstairs he was lead into the kitchen where a newspaper was lying on it in big bold letters it said Local children hunted down by mysterious axe murderer Then underneath, the story went like this: "Axe murderer threatens lives of 4 local children. Their friend Justin was killed whilst his friends were at his house, the axe murderer has been caught and is now facing a life sentence in jail."

Slowly Sam raised his head, he was grinning from ear to ear. He ran out of the room and was at Bella's house in an instant, he told her the news and she was overjoyed. As they were walking down to the park Sam wondered "Where's Lizzie, I haven't seen her in ages"...

star- in the first parigraph you you created suspence but then switched to a differant charicter thus creating suspence
star- good ending which backes up what you said earlyer and keeps reader gessing.
wish- it might just be me but you seem to change seenes a lot try to make it flow a bit more if possible