There was police investigating at Justin's house where Justin had been killed. Police tape surrounded the garden, there was six forensic police officers investigating the situation and trying to find out if there is any connection between the axe murderer and the children.
What no one knows is that Lizzie crept under the police tape and hid behined trees and in bushes.
The police then checked in the house, then they found a mobile phone just sitting on the breakfast bar. It was Lizzie's phone and because she hasn't been seen in a while they had a little scan thought it. They had to look through the texts, and there were texts from all her friends, and then they came across an unusual and very strange texts from a name ' Mr Acks '.
The texts were saying " the traps are up and tonight is the night for all your friends, Mwahahaha"
As the forensic team went to try and find out where Lizzie could be, one of the team spotted her out the window. So they all went running out to get her. She slowly put her hands on her head and walked backwards, she stood on a loose slate Which was part of her own trap. From a blink of an eye an axe came flying out of a tree and got Lizzie right on the back of her head.
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There was police investigating at Justin's house where Justin had been killed. Police tape surrounded the garden, there was six forensic police officers investigating the situation and trying to find out if there is any connection between the axe murderer and the children.
What no one knows is that Lizzie crept under the police tape and hid behined trees and in bushes.
The police then checked in the house, then they found a mobile phone just sitting on the breakfast bar. It was Lizzie's phone and because she hasn't been seen in a while they had a little scan thought it. They had to look through the texts, and there were texts from all her friends, and then they came across an unusual and very strange texts from a name ' Mr Acks '.
The texts were saying " the traps are up and tonight is the night for all your friends, Mwahahaha"
As the forensic team went to try and find out where Lizzie could be, one of the team spotted her out the window. So they all went running out to get her. She slowly put her hands on her head and walked backwards, she stood on a loose slate Which was part of her own trap. From a blink of an eye an axe came flying out of a tree and got Lizzie right on the back of her head.
star- good content
star- nice way of bilding up events
wish- Shorter sentances would create tens atmospher