A while after the police questioned Sam and Bella they were still in shock after Justin's death, and also seeing a tall figure of a man with an axe. It was on their mind for the rest of the day. "Bella i'm scared, what if Justin's murderer is following us, what if he will kill us next" Sam quietly said. "Keep calm Justin, i'm sure the police will find him". Bella and Sam were together alone having a conversation about Justin, they were sad about his death. Bella and Sam had heard about Justin's funeral and were a bit scared and nervous about it. "Justin what if the killer turns up at the funeral". "Don't worry Bella i'm sure he wont".....
Edited Version
A while after the police questioned Sam and Bella they were still in shock after Justin's death, and also seeing a tall figure of a man with an axe. It was on their mind for the rest of the day. "Bella i'm scared, what if Justin's murderer is following us, what if he will kill us next" Sam quietly said. "Keep calm Justin, i'm sure the police will find him". Bella and Sam were together alone having a conversation about Justin, they were sad about his death. Bella and Sam had heard about Justin's funeral and were a bit scared and nervous about it. "Justin what if the killer turns up at the funeral". "Don't worry Bella i'm sure he wont"..... *-Interesting *-Good dialogue wish-work on sentence structure
A while after the police questioned Sam and Bella they were still in shock after Justin's death, and also seeing a tall figure of a man with an axe. It was on their mind for the rest of the day. "Bella i'm scared, what if Justin's murderer is following us, what if he will kill us next" Sam quietly said. "Keep calm Justin, i'm sure the police will find him". Bella and Sam were together alone having a conversation about Justin, they were sad about his death. Bella and Sam had heard about Justin's funeral and were a bit scared and nervous about it. "Justin what if the killer turns up at the funeral". "Don't worry Bella i'm sure he wont".....
Edited Version
A while after the police questioned Sam and Bella they were still in shock after Justin's death, and also seeing a tall figure of a man with an axe. It was on their mind for the rest of the day. "Bella i'm scared, what if Justin's murderer is following us, what if he will kill us next" Sam quietly said. "Keep calm Justin, i'm sure the police will find him". Bella and Sam were together alone having a conversation about Justin, they were sad about his death. Bella and Sam had heard about Justin's funeral and were a bit scared and nervous about it. "Justin what if the killer turns up at the funeral". "Don't worry Bella i'm sure he wont".....
*-Interesting
*-Good dialogue
wish-work on sentence structure